26
Nov
10

gotta run

[preface note: natuaral obsessive feel of constantly being on the run feels like it could easily carry the repetition of a villanelle, but i want this to be a very quick one, tight]

couplet will be:
sorry hun
gotta run

secondary rhyme: go

opening was originally going to take “go” until i decided on “let me go” instead of “time to go” – which made it feel better left to the close
take “no” for an answer on the opening then – giving me the following first draft for start & end

sorry hun
one more? no
gotta run

over, done
let me go
sorry hun
gotta run

candidate remaining primary rhymes: fun none begun one (by one)
for the secondary rhyme, briefly thought to slip in some soft endings, as suggested by how i could go with –

won by one
lost by both
sorry hun

(but nothing else goes that direction – after all, i’m not filling in a rhyming crossword puzzle here – aiming for something “sorry hun / gotta run” is whispering in my ear – if what i’ve got won’t go there, i’ll rip out the “go” line & work something else in)

once begun
hit plateau
sorry hun

it was fun
now? hello?
gotta run

one by one
quid pro quo
sorry hun

last words? none
think as though
gotta run

[which concludes the first draft – might tweak or tighten or shift, but that gives enough for hit & run]

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